OH. MY. SOMEBODY, SECRET AUTHOR, THIS IS AMAZING. I am incoherent with glee!
First of all, I am in love with your writing style. Your descriptions are so vivid and just perfect, and they get the tone of the book so perfectly, from the half-hearted plaque onwards. :) Also I just love, love, love the way you've written Anathema and Adam, and I'm so pleased that you chose that prompt -- and I loved that you also managed to sneak in one of my other prompts, which was awesome -- because I kind of doubted that anybody would, as neither of them get enough love. I must offer you my most enthusiastic contrafibularities! ;)
In more specific gushing, the entire opening scene had me in stitches. I love the spying thing, and I love how Anathema just happily goes along with it and isn't quite at home with being referred to as a grown-up. :) Also, this:
Adam raised an eyebrow. "You're not a girl," he explained, "you're too old."
Anathema laughed. "Okay, do you want advice from somebody who was once – though a very long time ago, mind you - a girl herself?"
And this:
Anathema had another bite of Adam's mother's painstaking cake. "Why don't you go to your sister to talk about this stuff?"
Adam snorted. "You don't have siblings, do you?"
made me laugh so hard, particularly as an older sister to a brother who would probably sooner have consulted aliens, and not without reason. :)
I also love how you've written Aziraphale with Anathema, and the waiter assuming he and Crowley are a couple (of course), and Anathema's newfound Adam-given talent. And gah, when Anathema is trying to comfort Adam after the fire, but doesn't know how. I want to hug them both.
Finally, this whole passage:
"That's wonderful," Anathema said, feeling rather warm and fuzzy about it. She wasn't used to the kind of relationship she had with Adam – she hadn't any siblings or close family. Agnes had been her closest family member, and her other family members had felt the same way, so a shared interest of her was the only thing that really connected them. With Adam, Anathema felt a sense of pride and protectiveness that was unfamiliar. And seeing him succeed in the tiny milestones of young life was somehow especially heartwarming. "You two are quite the pair, aren't you?"
Adam burst: "Yeah, it's just, I dunno, Pepper grounds me, like. She reminds me that not everything in life is about a cosmic battle between Heaven and Hell or whatever. She reminds me to get outraged about things that I should be outraged about and to relax about the things that aren't really that important when you get down to it. She always listens to me but she doesn't just follow me like the others. She yells at me for being an idiot, sometimes. I quite like that about her, and . . . well. You see what I mean, then." Adam cleared his throat, blushing across his nose.
is concentrated awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww, and the ending? Perfect.
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First of all, I am in love with your writing style. Your descriptions are so vivid and just perfect, and they get the tone of the book so perfectly, from the half-hearted plaque onwards. :) Also I just love, love, love the way you've written Anathema and Adam, and I'm so pleased that you chose that prompt -- and I loved that you also managed to sneak in one of my other prompts, which was awesome -- because I kind of doubted that anybody would, as neither of them get enough love. I must offer you my most enthusiastic contrafibularities! ;)
In more specific gushing, the entire opening scene had me in stitches. I love the spying thing, and I love how Anathema just happily goes along with it and isn't quite at home with being referred to as a grown-up. :) Also, this:
Adam raised an eyebrow. "You're not a girl," he explained, "you're too old."
Anathema laughed. "Okay, do you want advice from somebody who was once – though a very long time ago, mind you - a girl herself?"
And this:
Anathema had another bite of Adam's mother's painstaking cake. "Why don't you go to your sister to talk about this stuff?"
Adam snorted. "You don't have siblings, do you?"
made me laugh so hard, particularly as an older sister to a brother who would probably sooner have consulted aliens, and not without reason. :)
I also love how you've written Aziraphale with Anathema, and the waiter assuming he and Crowley are a couple (of course), and Anathema's newfound Adam-given talent. And gah, when Anathema is trying to comfort Adam after the fire, but doesn't know how. I want to hug them both.
Finally, this whole passage:
"That's wonderful," Anathema said, feeling rather warm and fuzzy about it. She wasn't used to the kind of relationship she had with Adam – she hadn't any siblings or close family. Agnes had been her closest family member, and her other family members had felt the same way, so a shared interest of her was the only thing that really connected them. With Adam, Anathema felt a sense of pride and protectiveness that was unfamiliar. And seeing him succeed in the tiny milestones of young life was somehow especially heartwarming. "You two are quite the pair, aren't you?"
Adam burst: "Yeah, it's just, I dunno, Pepper grounds me, like. She reminds me that not everything in life is about a cosmic battle between Heaven and Hell or whatever. She reminds me to get outraged about things that I should be outraged about and to relax about the things that aren't really that important when you get down to it. She always listens to me but she doesn't just follow me like the others. She yells at me for being an idiot, sometimes. I quite like that about her, and . . . well. You see what I mean, then." Adam cleared his throat, blushing across his nose.
is concentrated awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww, and the ending? Perfect.
In conclusion: THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU!