Ohhhh I'm so intrigued! I love the scenario you've set up, and the alternating points of view. You write Watson really well.

It's so cool that this deals a bit with the fallout of Crowley's Very Long Nap. It puts him and Aziraphale in an unusual place and I'm digging it. I laughed at Crowley ribbing Aziraphale about his fondness for Wilde, that was adorable.

Mr. Banks' section made me laugh.

Looking forward to the next section! I haven't solved it so far, but I'll continue trying...