Liked the flow of the sentences - how the stopping and starting, breaking off to explain something else, conveyed the ackwardness, which I presume is what you were going for? XD You drew very nicely vivid pictures as well, and I applaud you for that.
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Date: 2008-12-02 08:31 am (UTC)